David Guinness

Very cute, Snoink! I really like your characters. :D Addie sounds a little like a kid I know... :)

It's beautifully written, Dreamy. I did see a couple of typos, but nothing that hindered your message. A few words here and there might be tweaked, but overall it's a ...

Well done, Snoink! This is so bizarre ...but well conceived and executed. It's much improved from earlier today; it's more realistic in context. (Hopefully, I'll be back later to fully ...

Mrvica... lol. ;) Well done, Pros! I really enjoyed this. I like your choice of rhyming structure, and the imagery is excellent. I'm looking forward to reading more of your ...

Hi Searria, As has been said: cute poem. I like your descriptions, and the rhyming captures the simplicity and playfulness of a guinea pig. I have two issues with the ...

For what it is, the poem serves its purpose well. The phrasing and syllables flow comfortably, though I'm not sure whether I would prefer this verse with or without punctuation... ...

This is...something. :D Ooh, look at the Ads by Google! :lol:

Oh, look at the Google ads... :D Spanish Omelet Recipe Asparagus Omelet Baked Omelet Best Omelet No need for soap, Dreamy, I assure you. Not yet, anyway. :)

It is rough in some spots, though I can't at the moment think of what would improve it. Generally, I like the rhythm very much. The diction is appropriate to ...

Okay, Waffles. :D (Caradoc > Caradog > cariadus, Welsh for "beloved") Just thought that was interesting. ;)

Although it isn't bad when taken as lyrics (I understand that), for the reader's sake, it would help to at least include a few punctuation marks. I do think it ...

Hi stilltyping, I enjoyed reading this. The rhythm, for the most part, has a very easy flow. Not everything rhymes perfectly, but the same rhythm remains, so that's okay. There ...

Hi antigone, First, if you can tell by my quick critique that I'm missing another level in this, please excuse me. It's happened before. :D I like this poem. I ...

I just have to put in my two bits. :) The original was good. This is better. :D "And love the hacker and the virus both." It's an amazing poem, ...

I like this poem very much. Well done, yoha_ahoy. There are a few diction and syntactic suggestions I might have, but I can't think of what they might be at ...